something euclidean

I'm still not sure how to change this around; I need to change the first line [I've had other crits on that as well, it's the first thing to be ...

Thanks for the most excellent crits! They were all very helpful and I appreciate it tons. I'm stripping the poem down to the bones and fixing the clarity issues, hopefully. ...

Really you should have a capital for the first word of every line if it's a poem... arg! please don't propagate that myth. Capitalization in poetry is subjective and open ...

I liked this; the only thing is the cadence of the last line doesn't have the same long-wavelength feeling of the rest of the poem. still: physics and poetry go ...

I appreciate the response, so thanks -- I'm pretty new, too, so that was definately helpful; it's always good to have an insider's view of how a forum works.

sorry. I'm of the 'poetry = figurative language' camp, not 'poetry = trappings of verse', which I guess makes me kind of pretentious now that I think about it, but ...

I like the "talk to the hand" reference and the title tons. I get such a kick out of this poem I'm not sure I have anything serious to say ...

I appreciate the crit, Ed. :] (ps: life gets easier if you just call me B.) I just realized I made a mistake with the second-to-last line, the break is ...